This is cool and laid back, I really like that scratchy drum sound in the beat too.

Good work, especially for a beginner. I particularly liked what you had from about two minutes in til the end, I really liked all the little sounds you used, and the modulation too. Excellent stuff.

I noticed a few problems as well and have some advice. The hats on the first part sound a little weird, it kind of sounds like the sample was slowed too much in post processing. I also thought the sounds at the beginning could of used more body and oomph, you could try adding some compressors to achieve this (there's actually many other ways to this as well). Also I thought the breakdown from about 1:05 to 1:40 dragged on a bit. The song also ends abruptly and suddenly, you can try adding some silence to the end of your track and just let whatever is reverberating kind of fade out.

This is a great start, keep working hard, who knows what you might achieve some day.

This seems a little different from last time, like some sounds have gotten louder. At times they can be overpowering. The drum crescendo from 1 minute 20 seconds to 1 minute 30 seconds gets too loud. Also, from about the 30 second mark to about the 1 minute 30 second mark the piano gets buried underneath other sounds. The piano is what grabs your attention in this song, it should stay the focal point of the song.

Try giving your sounds more stereo space. Look for a feature in your software that says "pan", this will let you move sounds left and right in the stereo field. By simply spreading out your sounds just a little bit you can give them better clarity.